I agree with another reviewer's comment on the potential of this piece. There's solid storytelling--the classic "Hero's Journey"--and imaginative concepts well illustrated, like the special abilities conferred on someone through mystic ritual. Alpha's abilities stand out, especially. I wonder what else Omega has in his arsenal.
The critique of the animation has already been covered. My main issue is with the audio. It would have been better to have more actors playing the male characters rather than recording them all with your voice. You're fine playing the young hero, but variety of timbre and reading is missing from the other parts. Also, in your recording, there are a bunch of mouth noises accompanying consonants, little clicks suggesting a dry tongue and gums, that needed to be ferreted out and removed for a cleaner sound. I'd have loved to have been an actor in this project.